Any advice on this essay ?
How can we learn who we truly are if we do not at least try to embody various personalities or characters throughout our lives, especially when we step into the spotlight? I believe that playing a role or a character in the spotlight represents a tremendous asset to discover who we truly are or who we want to be.

Indeed, Bruce Wayne is at the same time an eccentric billionaire, a playboy and a masked hero, and that helps him to pinpoint the values that he would like to convey. Besides, playing a role allows him to portray himself as the person that he would like to embody, without jeopardizing his private life.

Nevertheless, the way people could gratify us and even brag us in the spotlight, might persuade us that we are a totally different person. How exactly can we be sure of who we are innately?

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Any advice on this essay ? 
How can we learn who we truly are if we do not at least try to embody various personalities or characters throughout our lives, especially when we step into the spotlight? I believe that playing a role or a character in the spotlight represents a tremendous asset to discover who we truly are or who we want to be.

Indeed, Bruce Wayne is at the same time an eccentric billionaire, a playboy and a masked hero, and that helps him to pinpoint the values that he would like to convey. Besides, playing a role allows him to portray himself as the person that he would like to embody, without jeopardizing his private life.

Nevertheless, the way people could gratify us and even brag us in the spotlight, might persuade us that we are a totally different person. How exactly can we be sure of who we are innately?

gdt · Answer

"Instead, Bruce Wayne is an eccentric billionaire, a playboy and a masked hero all at the same time."

"the way that people gratify us and even speak of us might persuade us that we are someone totally different. How then, can we be exactly sure of who we innately are?"

nikkipotato · Answer

It’s pretty good! The first sentence is a bit long though.

nikkipotato · Answer

c'est très bon et très formel.  peut-être raccourcir les phrases?

"Instead, Bruce Wayne is an eccentric billionaire, a playboy and a masked hero all at the same time."

"the way that people gratify us and even speak of us might persuade us that we are someone totally different. How then, can we be exactly sure of who we innately are?"

It’s pretty good! The first sentence is a bit long though.

c'est très bon et très formel. peut-être raccourcir les phrases?

Do you have any idioms that I could add to this text ?

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"Instead, Bruce Wayne is an eccentric billionaire, a playboy and a masked hero all at the same time.""the way that people gratify us and even speak of us might persuade us that we are someone totally different. How then, can we be exactly sure of who we innately are?"

It’s pretty good! The first sentence is a bit long though.

c'est très bon et très formel. peut-être raccourcir les phrases?

Do you have any idioms that I could add to this text ?

Ask native speakers questions for free

"Instead, Bruce Wayne is an eccentric billionaire, a playboy and a masked hero all at the same time."

"the way that people gratify us and even speak of us might persuade us that we are someone totally different. How then, can we be exactly sure of who we innately are?"