¿Esto suena natural? I would like to visit Italy.
As you know, there are a lot of fascinating things there, such as many historical places,delicious foods and cheerful people.

One of my dreams is to visit places where Audrey Hepburn went in the movie,Roman Holiday.

And the place I want to go most is St. Peter's Basilica.
This building is really attractive for me not only because it is majestic, but also because my favorite sculpture, Pieta is in it.

But actually, we cannot see this sculpture directly because this is enclosed with glass.
The reason for this is that this sculpture is so beautiful that some people became mad and broke it.
I wish I could see this marvelous sculpture without obstractive glass.

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¿Esto suena natural? I would like to visit Italy.
As you know, there are a lot of fascinating things there, such as many historical places,delicious foods and cheerful people.

 One of my dreams is to visit places where Audrey Hepburn went in the movie,Roman Holiday.

And the place I want to go most is St. Peter's Basilica.
This building is really attractive for me not only because it is majestic, but also because my favorite sculpture, Pieta is in it.

But actually, we cannot see this sculpture directly because this is enclosed with glass.
The reason for this is that this sculpture is so beautiful that some people became mad and broke it.
I wish I could see this marvelous sculpture without obstractive glass.

ndh · Accepted Answer

It was almost perfect but there are a few errors.

1. the place i want to go *the* most is....

2. But actually -> Unfortunately

3. this is enclosed -> it is enclosed/ covered with glass

afafo · Answer

@S2s it's perfect . I want to visit Italy too 😂😂😂

maninang · Answer

This flows nicely! And yeah, Italy seems awesome. I want to see Florence~

There are a couple grammatical mistakes that I see native English speakers make, overall this is really good.
 I think you meant obstructive instead of obstractive.

It was almost perfect but there are a few errors.

1. the place i want to go the most is....

2. But actually -> Unfortunately

3. this is enclosed -> it is enclosed/ covered with glass

@S2s it's perfect . I want to visit Italy too 😂😂😂

This flows nicely! And yeah, Italy seems awesome. I want to see Florence~

There are a couple grammatical mistakes that I see native English speakers make, overall this is really good.
I think you meant obstructive instead of obstractive.

It was almost perfect but there are a few errors.

1. the place i want to go the most is....

2. But actually -> Unfortunately

3. this is enclosed -> it is enclosed/ covered with glass

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It was almost perfect but there are a few errors. 1. the place i want to go *the* most is....2. But actually -> Unfortunately3. this is enclosed -> it is enclosed/ covered with glass

@S2s it's perfect . I want to visit Italy too 😂😂😂

This flows nicely! And yeah, Italy seems awesome. I want to see Florence~There are a couple grammatical mistakes that I see native English speakers make, overall this is really good. I think you meant obstructive instead of obstractive.

It was almost perfect but there are a few errors. 1. the place i want to go *the* most is....2. But actually -> Unfortunately3. this is enclosed -> it is enclosed/ covered with glass

Ask native speakers questions for free

It was almost perfect but there are a few errors.

1. the place i want to go the most is....

2. But actually -> Unfortunately

3. this is enclosed -> it is enclosed/ covered with glass

This flows nicely! And yeah, Italy seems awesome. I want to see Florence~

There are a couple grammatical mistakes that I see native English speakers make, overall this is really good.
I think you meant obstructive instead of obstractive.

It was almost perfect but there are a few errors.

1. the place i want to go the most is....

2. But actually -> Unfortunately

3. this is enclosed -> it is enclosed/ covered with glass