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The bar chart illustrates the difficulties that people encounter when they move to a new country, which varies according to people’s ages.

The greatest problem for older age groups is arranging healthcare, and their numbers are over 35 percent. However, people aged 18 to 34 find it less hard to sort out healthcare, which is approximately at 31 percent.

In contrast to their organizing healthcare difficulties, only 29 percent of people in the over 55 age group have trouble arranging finances, while 34 percent of people in the youngest age group find it the most difficult.

Regarding finding schools for their children, people of the all age groups find it the easiest. 19 percent of people who are 35 to 54 old are affected by this, while only 2 percent of people over 55 find it difficult.

In conclusion, all people experience problems to some extent. However, people of all ages find it more difficult to organize finances and healthcare, while they have less difficulties with education.